This is the first of five pieces I have written for voice week. Each piece is based on the same prompt but told using a different character’s voice. I decided to use my own prompt for voice week.
The Crime – Part 1
I always loved hunting in the winter the best. The crisp air from the falling snow made it easier for me to smell my prey. That night the smell of aftershave escaped the security booth and nipped at my nose and the odour of urine wafting about from the homeless guy churned my stomach. It was still early. I had time to be fussy. I waited in the shadows of the parking lot. A greasy aroma from the diner down the road lingered in the air. Then I smelled her, twenty something, clean, healthy, and alone. She exited the hospital and rounded the corner at a brisk pace but not brisk enough. I swiftly made my move and temporarily warmed my insides as the life flowed from her into me.
What do you think of this character’s voice? What does the piece tell you about the character?