Shaken not stirred is how I drink them. Tonight it is a dose of liquid courage. I usually sip them to make them last. This is the cheapest place to get them. It is always our first stop before heading to the clubs.
I glance over to the corner. The blond looks like she might cry. Mike teased me about her when I noticed her on the way in. I do not mind the teasing. I like older women. They are easier to talk with. They also tend to be more experienced. That is something I need more of.
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That was my second entry into Voice Week. Each piece is told using a different voice but basically using the same theme.
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The short, one-thought sentences and lack of contractions definitely stand out from yesterday. This one’s younger obviously, in his twenties? I’m guessing out of college and working in a cubicle somewhere, but still in the party-all-night-hopefully-get-laid stage of life.
Very good! Glad he was so clear. I was not sure at first.
I love the way this character comes together. The first line, for obvious reasons, cast an image in my head of a James Bond-esque man, smooth and collected. Then instantly, the second sentence changes that, and he starts to take form.
And I agree — the difference in voice from yesterday is fantastic. 🙂
I think this guy aspires to the smooth and sophisticated ways of Bond. He likes the finer things in life but because of his age and current place in life these things are only aspirations for him.
ahh….am starting to see the scene roll out. There is definitely youth in his voice and aged in hers….
Glad both of those things came across clearly. They are important to the scene.
What a shift! I love how distinguishable these two voices are, how your word choice in the first entry painted the woman as almost hopeless, and how this one shows us this sort of carefree dude.
=)
Hmmm…so will we get to see what the friend thinks of all this? Perhaps his disdain for the older woman, a smart alack comment?
A complete contrast to yesterday Billie Jo.
I got the feeling she was in this place because she had no choice, whereas he is merely dropping by on the way to somewhere else. I also get the feeling they are going to get together but I sense it may not be a ‘marriage made in heaven’.
Bring on day 3.
I think he’s a kid… late teens or early twenties.. still studying.. which explains the need to go to such places for cheap liquor… looking for mischief, attracting mischief and bad-asses like a magnet!
He won’t leave without talking to the blonde, would he?