Voice 4 – Voice Week 2014

That guy is getting what he has coming today. Study partners. Yeah right.

I admit I lost my cool a bit with Maria. I wanted to scare her. I pushed her too hard. Her lip is healing now. Most of the bruising has gone. Stitches have mostly dissolved. She’ll be pretty again soon.

Look at how she looks at me. She adores me really. I’m so afraid of losing her. She makes me go crazy sometimes.

Wink.

“Maria?”

“Help me. Someone please help me.”

This is my fourth post for voice week. Just one more left. I have enjoyed reading all the other writer’s entries into voice week too. If you have a bit of time go check them out. If you want to participate or read any of the other participants work you can head over to voice week head quarters and find out more there.

As always comments are appreciated.

Advertisements

About Billie Jo Schinnerer

Born and raised on the edge of the Helderberg Escarpment in eastern New York. Formerly a primary and middle school teacher. Moved to the North West area of England in 2003. Now a mother of three and a wannabe author.
This entry was posted in Voice Week and tagged , . Bookmark the permalink.

10 Responses to Voice 4 – Voice Week 2014

  1. Seriously, what is going on here? So much build-up! I like this voice, kind of feckless and conceited. A whole different look at the situation. Can’t wait to see how it wraps up

  2. Pingback: Voice 4 – Voice Week 2014 | Into the Sun | Voice Week HQ

  3. Ah. Abusive boyfriend. Very interesting look into his head. I wonder if Daddy has any inkling that he gave her the busted lip?

  4. jubilare says:

    I wondered, after the first voice, if she was going to shoot, or otherwise harm the guy she was with. Now I think that even more…

  5. Carrie says:

    This is a strong voice, very cavalier, arrogant.

  6. Tara R. says:

    The suspense grows! Anxious to read how all this turns out, if someone is only wounded or pays the ultimate price.

  7. Evan says:

    Hmm…the righteousness here both interests and disgusts me. Though, I suppose that’s the nature of the character. Excellent work.

  8. elmowrites says:

    The abusive boyfriend’s voice is interesting because you show his weakess, which no doubt he keps hidden from everyone else. Can’t wait for tomorrow, although I have my suspicions…

  9. Nice look into Niko’s head! I like this voice; it’s distinct, but it’s not exaggerated. Great work!

  10. jenniesisler says:

    An abusive boyfriend who’s about to find himself in over his head? I think Niko is quite a complex character considering we only have 100 words to use for these scenes

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s